visual communication: persons of note crit feedback + postcards first draft

My intent:

To create a series of work that not only represents Larkin but explores the nature of his poetry and the environment he lived in and the inspired this.

Perhaps celebrating but certainly observing the mundane and everyday life, maybe with a sense of humour but definitely with the sense of distance I get from his poems.

Things I am not pleased with:

I am not yet sure I am capturing the Larkin essence, it maybe needs some hints of dark humour as well as his famous melancholy

Postcard designs were intended to be finals but were not thought out well enough, particularly in media choices. It looks messy and haphazard, and I will also try to work on lettering. As it will be digitally composed I can luckily change things around. 

There is not yet a solid base for stamp designs yet.

CRIT FEEDBACK

Everyone seemed pleased with my intentions and how these were panning out in the images. The problems lay more in the construction of the postcards and I was given some really good suggestions for these that I completely agree with and would like to do!

However, considering the amount of time left I will prioritise the stamps and poster and if I have time to remake the postcards that would be great.

The lamplights are not necessary and making the light bigger from the house would draw more attention to this point. A more dramatic perspective could also be nice.

The composition in this feels split a little too 50/50. A 60/40 or 70/30 composition would appear more balanced.

Make the window with Larkin in more in the line of sight and more obvious. The path could be narrower and take up less of the image.

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I'm also concerned with the colour scheme of this series. The reds and greens seem a bit bold to be concerned with Larkin. I also put no time into experimenting with this type of media, which was a stupid thing to do! I could have made much more informed choices if I had.

Laura Carlin

But I did take this piece by Laura Carlin as an inspiration model. I was mainly concerned with how she seems to have layered pencil over paint, to suggest shadow but also as an aesthetic model.